Brush Fire

[Slommy]

I can never shut down
(Shut down)
(Shut down)
Make me feel the rush now.
(Rush now)
(Rush now)
City like a brush fire
(Brush fire)
(Brush fire)
Oh...
They know they're alone.
There's nowhere to go.
No place to run
How'd you get so far from home?
"I've been chasing above."
"But there was something below."
Right under my knows..

(Am I under control?)

I can never shut down
(Shut down)
(Shut down)
Make me feel the rush now.
(Rush now)
(Rush now)
City like a brush fire
(Brush fire)
(Brush fire)
Oh..

This is not a game.
This roof cannot contain me
And we don't want the same things
But they got us all chain linked
Fate eight Oh eight ..I hate speaking.
Just listen to these drums child.
For my machine kind
Three eyes,
I'm on the brink.
It's like I breathe fire.
Every freestyles
Just for me

[Baron Mynd]

It would probably sound a lot better as a track than it reads by text standards, that’s no slight it’s just difficult to gauge something by the metrics of another format. The beat is there, but without the other elements like flow, delivery, presence etc we can only really judge this on its text merits and it isn’t strong by those standards in text. Again, that’s no slight, it’s just an entirely different realm and difficult to judge this by because of it. Purely as a text verse, I think the shorter lined flow was cool, the syllable count per line was pretty on-point but as a reader the content was attention grabbing enough to really hold my interest. There’s morning I felt stood out as quotable or that made me want to re-read through, as a listener I would perhaps be more engaged and ready to forgive it more rather than pick it apart. It’s like I say, text probably isn’t the medium for this.

Keep that pen moving.

[Slommy]

It would probably sound a lot better as a track than it reads by text standards, that’s no slight it’s just difficult to gauge something by the metrics of another format. The beat is there, but without the other elements like flow, delivery, presence etc we can only really judge this on its text merits and it isn’t strong by those standards in text. Again, that’s no slight, it’s just an entirely different realm and difficult to judge this by because of it. Purely as a text verse, I think the shorter lined flow was cool, the syllable count per line was pretty on-point but as a reader the content was attention grabbing enough to really hold my interest. There’s morning I felt stood out as quotable or that made me want to re-read through, as a listener I would perhaps be more engaged and ready to forgive it more rather than pick it apart. It’s like I say, text probably isn’t the medium for this.

Keep that pen moving.

You are right, all my posts are made to be audio, but that scene is kinda dead here until the acapella tournament
I don't really rap battle either in text my skill is in phonetics, syllables. Right now im practicing alot with my microphone interface ect. I'm asking bag lots of audio questions and grabbing new plugins all the time truth is I know how I want the hook to sound but I dont know how to do it myself yet. thank you for reading though.