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10 Lines, 1 Round
No verse feeding, biting, or anything else you can do 'wit yah mouf!
Rules:
10 Lines, 1 Round
No verse feeding, biting, or anything else you can do 'wit yah mouf!
You Dont Want None
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aiht elmo da cracker, how do ya stack up\\
beatz is on the page so you betta call back up\\
and i aint just running my mouth, ill knock you out\\
get big bird and the grouch, or else just take the "count"\\
and so you want with beatz, you dont want it with me\\
tell everyone elmo aint red, hes suppose to be green\\
but landed in my streets, and got torn to smitherines\\
i mean how hard can u be, while your repping Tennessee\\
now i have your crew pouring out, all there hennesey\\
thinking he should of taking that right turn, back to sesame\\
just suttin off the top gl to ya. not into prewrites either
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off the top... Letz Go!!
I'll rip yah brains out yah skull like a SCIENTIST fuck yah CLIENT LIST i'll DIAL IN and kill yah "mother"board like a hackers FRYIN' IT!
hate to say it, but im FORCED-TO ABORT YOU, 'cause nobody wanna RECORD YOU,
so fondle yah feelings- I'll hand you a few "bra's" to "SUPPORT YOU"!
yah FORCED DUDE- statin' FACTS LATELY i STAB BABIES rappin' to the FAT LADY,
I'm "spittin' on trains" cause I kill yah "TRACKS DAILY"!!
he tryin' to ACT CRAZY- make a few HARDCORE TOPICS while i CHAR MORE OPTICS,
and "recycle yah trash" to make "CARD-BOARD BOXES"!!
CREEP IN and POP G's got trouble KEEPIN' em OFF ME, he SPEAKIN' it SOFTLY
betta think about LEAVIN' the HOT STREETZ, I'm known for puttin' more niggas to SLEEP than SOFT SHEETS!
so which of yah friends JACKED YOU OFF? 'cause I'll shake you off my dick and leave this kid like piss stains in BATHROOM STALLS!!
You Dont Want None
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Need votes here pls
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uppppp
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Not a lot of hits here. offdabeatz has my vote because he attempted more, Elmo seemed like he was goin more for multis than hits.. it may help to write out a verse you think hits hard with simple rhyme schemes, then add in multis where they seem to fit.
v/beatz
and ease off the caps elm0
V/ beatz, because I could hardly read Elmo's verse. Beatz came with a couple good misses, no great punches, but enough to secure this win. Keep battling fellas, you'll elavate eventually.
v/ Beats
^Like post above, stay off the caps Elmo
Take a Look at my Life
aiht elmo da cracker, how do ya stack up\\
beatz is on the page so you betta call back up\\
-ehh.. not really feeling this- 1/10
and i aint just running my mouth, ill knock you out\\
get big bird and the grouch, or else just take the "count"\\
-nice i see the punch... but still i've seen his name played once, n once is enough- 3/10
and so you want with beatz, you dont want it with me\\
tell everyone elmo aint red, hes suppose to be green\\
-eh, not really feeling this- 2/10
but landed in my streets, and got torn to smitherines\\
i mean how hard can u be, while your repping Tennessee\\
-not really any solid rhymes at all in this- 2/10
now i have your crew pouring out, all there hennesey\\
thinking he should of taking that right turn, back to sesame\\
-eh again see a person name played once n you don't gotta see it again- 1/10
9/50
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hate to say it, but im FORCED-TO ABORT YOU, 'cause nobody wanna RECORD YOU,
so fondle yah feelings- I'll hand you a few "bra's" to "SUPPORT YOU"!
-nice, i liked this opener i feel it was stronger- 5/10
yah FORCED DUDE- statin' FACTS LATELY i STAB BABIES rappin' to the FAT LADY,
I'm "spittin' on trains" cause I kill yah "TRACKS DAILY"!!
-nice i had to read this one twice to get the full vision of what u was saying- 6/10
he tryin' to ACT CRAZY- make a few HARDCORE TOPICS while i CHAR MORE OPTICS,
and "recycle yah trash" to make "CARD-BOARD BOXES"!!
-ehh i didn't really see the punch here- 1/10
CREEP IN and POP G's got trouble KEEPIN' em OFF ME, he SPEAKIN' it SOFTLY
betta think about LEAVIN' the HOT STREETZ, I'm known for puttin' more niggas to SLEEP than SOFT SHEETS!
-okay ender- 5/10
17/50
I felt like Elmo had the stronger bars, due to the fact that going at someones name for that long is just boring. ya kno? both drops wasn't that hard going from the start.
V/Elmo
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Both dudes were ehhh, but never worry ya'll learn gradually. Elmo was more concerned about multies, although some where wack/forced but he still had some good ones which gave his verse a little complexity even though his structure was poor....pls stop capitalizing multies, it looks wack!
Off da beat was extremely simple and basic with weak end rhymes and some even barely rhymed, he also hardly dissed his opponent even in the 'generic' sense....so work on that...
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after all said and done mvgt:elmo for atleast dissing in comparism to offdabeat.....no hate fellas!
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Both dudes were ehhh, but never worry ya'll learn gradually. Elmo was more concerned about multies, although some where wack/forced but he still had some good ones which gave his verse a little complexity even though his structure was poor....pls stop capitalizing multies, it looks wack!
Off da beat was extremely simple and basic with weak end rhymes and some even barely rhymed, he also hardly dissed his opponent even in the 'generic' sense....so work on that...
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after all said and done mvgt:elmo for atleast dissing in comparism to offdabeat.....no hate fellas!
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vote- elmo
beats cam way to simple with alot of misses. elmo u have to learn how to set up ur lines n word ur bars better. ur concepts were ok.. some played like the track/train line but overall he had better attempts
So this is actually the first battle that I couldnt find ONE good quotable for. As it goes though, I thing elmo was as bad & simple as offdabeatz.
V/Elmo
Beatz
aiht elmo da cracker, how do ya stack up\\
beatz is on the page so you betta call back up\\
more of a statement not a punch
and i aint just running my mouth, ill knock you out\\
get big bird and the grouch, or else just take the "count"\\
ok not a bad reference here
and so you want with beatz, you dont want it with me\\
tell everyone elmo aint red, hes suppose to be green\\
nah weak reference
but landed in my streets, and got torn to smitherines\\
i mean how hard can u be, while your repping Tennessee\\
not bad ehhh personal
now i have your crew pouring out, all there hennesey\\
thinking he should of taking that right turn, back to sesame\\
ehhh not bad ok concept
Elmo
I'll rip yah brains out yah skull like a SCIENTIST fuck yah CLIENT LIST i'll DIAL IN and kill yah "mother"board like a hackers FRYIN' IT!
these multis were good and the overall concept was good nice opener here
hate to say it, but im FORCED-TO ABORT YOU, 'cause nobody wanna RECORD YOU,
so fondle yah feelings- I'll hand you a few "bra's" to "SUPPORT YOU"!
lol
yah FORCED DUDE- statin' FACTS LATELY i STAB BABIES rappin' to the FAT LADY,
I'm "spittin' on trains" cause I kill yah "TRACKS DAILY"!!
this was a cool concept but ur finisher cant be shorter then ur setup
he tryin' to ACT CRAZY- make a few HARDCORE TOPICS while i CHAR MORE OPTICS,
and "recycle yah trash" to make "CARD-BOARD BOXES"!!
same here
CREEP IN and POP G's got trouble KEEPIN' em OFF ME, he SPEAKIN' it SOFTLY
betta think about LEAVIN' the HOT STREETZ, I'm known for puttin' more niggas to SLEEP than SOFT SHEETS!
ok more statementish here but overall good multis cool concept
I thought beatz came to basic in this had a couple np hits that were ehhh. Elmo has potential had nice concepts but gotta work on making his finishers longer then setups couple bars were that threw the punch off. Other then that he takes this for better concepts and nice multi usage in areas.
V/Elmo
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