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    EB- Story of a Kid

    posting one more song for the night. Story of a Kid.
    feedback appreciated.

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    EB- Reflection
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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    yea ridding the beat strait would like to hear you on a more complex beat though...lyrics are cool....lol...cant even write my lyrics down they invisible...you just need some practice my dude...keep em commin..
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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    I think it was cool, i like the ambient sound in the background, kinda feel chilled and unforced. love the flow and beats, but yeah a couple more beats here and there won't hurt tho. but keep the ambient sound.
    great work!
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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    Your voice kind of remind me of Augz haha. This is aight. Flow is str8, had a few slumps in some spots. Hook is actually nice though.

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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    Damn, your flow was good and the beat was cool, but i agree like lear said "had a few slumps in some spots" You need to keep workin!

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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    I like the beat on this pretty good oldschool vibing shit. You're riding the beat well, lyrically it's a bit general but for something like this it's alright. Content is there, chorus is alright, nothing crazy but it works for this type of track. Maybe try to improve the vocal quality a bit, but not bad man, keep at it.

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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    lyrics weren't bad. I like the theme, couldve been a little more creative wit it though. Flow was pretty cool actually. I like the way you rode the beat. Beat was kinda monotonous at times, but you worked it. Delivery could be improved, i think thats what threw this off just a bit for me. At times it was dope but at times i felt like i could almost see you reading the lyrics off the paper. Chorus was that way too. Overall not bad, it was a good listen. Just improve your delivery and approach and you'll be straight

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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    much appreciated guys.
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    Re: EB- Story of a Kid

    Don't like the beat basic doesn't bump melody is weak
    Flow on the beat is ok consistent not boring or basic flow
    Mixdown of the vocals could be better on the track

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