Delusional Miscreant

[[k]onquerer]

i know it's kinda a long read, but its easy.

Breaktime, which means downin monsters and droppin rhymes
I like how im quick and can spit complicated lines
at the drop of a dime.....
I'm not a bank teller, but I can make big change.
Word vomit stored deep in the chamber of my brain
Fighting to get out of my cells like a prisoner stuck in jail.
I'm fucked up 25 hours 8 days a week
rich kid like me ain't meant for the streets.
I smoke, toke, and inject shit into my veins
just to keep my thoughts locked up in chains.
I think God gave me some pretty fucked up membranes.
How did I end up like this, stuck in this seat on a cargo train.
I'm runnin on no sleep, that's why this shit is so oblique.
the monster is comin out and ready to fuckin skeet
all over your dumb bitch and your slutty little sister.
she gave me so much brain that afterwards I quizzed her.
My rhymes are celebrated like national fuckin holidays
and your rhymes impress only the bitches that can't help but stray.
they aint anything eventful.....
nothing crazy and not suspenseful
I feel like Simon Cowell dissin' you dude
but I can't help that your shit's just way outta tune.
Give up, you unknown skill lacking mother fucker
and get back to your routes as a dairy milk trucker.
Laugh at you as your try to be successful as a smuggler.
but I'ma sit here, kick my feet up and order around my butler.
Game over, time to find your bitch and sit with her to cuddle.

Same deal as last time, posted this on another site a couple mins ago as Dj AX, no biting.

[[k]onquerer]

haha damn what the fuck did i just post

[[k]onquerer]

forgot to post links here they are
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[.Prime.]

This was really good, though some parts I felt you didn't carry on a great idea like..

I think God gave me some pretty fucked up membranes.
How did I end up like this, stuck in this seat on a cargo train.

^ When you mention the train, you should mention whats so fucked up about it? Is the train your mind racing? Is it the intensity of your rhymes? You need to carry on this idea, which I really like, so the reader can say to themselves "woah that shit was sick".

Favorite line was

the monster is comin out and ready to fuckin skeet
all over your dumb bitch and your slutty little sister.
she gave me so much brain that afterwards I quizzed her.

^ Shit made me laugh, keep elevatin man.

[KidTec]

hey i think this is pretty cool, i gonna try to get like this.