The New Kid Doesn't Want To Look Stupid.

[M3]

Well, the title pretty much says it all. I joined this forum today, and I don't want to seem like some half-baked rapper or something. I want to ask all of you for tips on how to become a good rapper. I just put something together quickly for you to see, and tell me where my skill level at:

My beginning's gonna be like,
I'm running this shit its aigh,
None of this is new to me,
I've been rapping ever since I hit puberty.
You wanna battle me?
Get ready for your medication,
Because I'm untouchable by you,
Just call me radiation.
Don't harm your health,
I just shine right through it,
Don't try to be like me,
No one can do it.

I appreciate the help!

Thanks for reading.

*M3

[Damz]

Alright I'm going in. Cut the lights.
Whats good the names Damz nice ta meet you.

The first thing too set strait is your flow.

"'Flow' is defined as "the rhythms and rhymes" of a hip-hop song's lyrics and how they interact - the book How to Rap breaks flow down into rhyme, rhyme schemes, and rhythm (also known as cadence). 'Flow' is also sometimes used to refer to elements of the delivery (pitch, timbre, volume) as well, though often a distinction is made between the flow and the delivery"

Ok, Flowing is made out of the way you rhyme, and deliver but the main mechanics behind flowing is syllables.

Your syllables are way off.

1 2 3 4 5
My beginning's gonna be like,
1 2 3 4 5 6
I'm running this shit its aigh,
1 2 3 4 5 6 7
None of this is new to me,
1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8
I've been rapping ever since I hit puberty.
1 2 3 4
You wanna battle me?

Ok I know your new. this is very off. and it makes it choppy.
You want to train yourself to write your bars with the same amount of syllables.

Heres a keystyle too show syllables.:

I'm nice let me work it,
Like twice I mean reverse it,
I'm ice cold so reverse this,
My verse I write in cursive,

The syllable count is sixx.

Your structure is decent.
Structure is how you have lines and bars.

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx/
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx/ 1. bar.

Dont want:
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx/
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx/

Rhyme schemes also help flow alot.

There is plenty of schemes. and once you get better you can improve.

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx(a)/
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx(b)/

The best one personally.

xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx(A), xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx(B),
xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx(A), xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx(b),

Ok now your lyrics, and very basic and played.
Always step ahead. be creative. write what you think.
What you see. Practice. practice. you seem your style is a battler.

Too be a lyricist, You have to want it,

[M3]

Wow, thanks for all of that advice, it really helped me. I'm just hoping I can use it in a battle soon, since I just started rapping really soon.

*M3

[Damz]

No problem budyy.

[slstone]

yea for ur first post it wasnt bad bro keep it up [NL] hit pretty much everything lol

yo [NL] can i get ur opinion on my first post

[Damz]

Eh. when i have timee.