I've been writin Audio tracks for a while but would like to elevate my style to the next level. Alot of what i have written lately I get stuck after a verse and have a hard time styin on topic with out gettin to choppy. This is a verse from a track i'm workin on and would like some feed back on how i can make it a lil more complex.
Catz approach me n say they hear I’m gifted ..
See n hear me spit it in such a vivid picture ..
My 9 can Outkast Elavators dat’ll leave ya spirits lifted ..
But’I value freedom greater than dem years in prison ..
Plenty writtin time, but all dem years u missin ..
Will Leave ya whole fuckin life ina weird position ..
Keep my eyez on da prize,
But I drive full speed wit the steerin missin ..
Do u hear me, listen ..
Shortest distance between 2 points is a straight line ..
Trample faggotz in my way mo brutal than 8 timez a hate crime
I hate Lies an fake rapperz dat take lines from great ones
I can never break stride,
Arms full ov tickin Rolexes we livin in fake times ..
Hate gunz dat take lives, flow plex n make rhymes ..
Break knives brought to the great Hip Hop Gun fight ..
The shit is dumb right?
The drug world aint the rap games only story ..
Lame phony’s bore me, Life sucks n I blame it all on hoes n Maurie ..
Cain Dro n 40’s,
Fake catz dat shit on they friends ,get ta the top, n claim a lonely glory ..
Remain the same in this game n proclaim that it wont destory me ..
