SirusX 2.0 - Words are Weapons by 2triple0

[2triple0]

SirusX 2.0 - Words are Weapons
by 2triple0


you'll enjoy Sirus' piece...it was fresh
read it a couple of times before you feel the respect
that I have of any reader who understands it,
because there are so many techniques in this rap shit
to create a world for your local drug dealer
who was telling a story to a girl that doesn't mind being touched either
told himself i'm not getting locked after i got robbed by some hoods...
then the story flashes back to the girl with good looks
and she is trying to get some drugs off this dude
and he won't give her any and then she says come to the front
'i put a curse on him... and ended her dance in a fire
i loved the flow and wanted to write more but my hands just got tired
and i started writing a verse but none of the spelling was correct...
put this kid in his context, look at his home and you'll tell its the projects...
to tell you the truth, i've been thinking about this story all day,
because i related to it because this cat i know was like sorry your gay
when i tried to get a twenty sack (lol)
anyways i feel this story a lot because it was a heavy track,
it reminds me of this town that i live nearby called south hylton...
so i enjoyed this like a buried treasure let you know we about millions
and even if your reading it days before i even did,
it don't matter i experienced the rhyme before i even seen it,
which is some incredible shit! that was really powerful
that you were capable of writing something you kept unconditional...




alright peace out man words are weapons

[2triple0]

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...215/index.html
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/show...541/index.html

[Calli]

i dont know man, i mean your a good writer, but i just dont know about hyping someone elses drop with a drop of your own, maybe its cuz i was not feeling it, i know you had a more relatible view. anyway......your a good writer.

keep at it.

[2triple0]

good looks calli.... i know it is a little different, i'm just trying to test it out maybe because i'm not so used to posting verses online... i've known about the net for a long time, but i don't drop that often or know that many people online personally... i have heard of other cats online but never really talked with anyone, so this is kind of my way of reaching out to the rap world because i don't have any other outlet of speaking through myself... maybe it would have been better to name the piece something like 'Feed to Sirus' Watch Your Back' There was more i wanted to say like about the title being called watch your back and how i related to that because i think if you concentrate on your back it can really help you succeed in life because of the way that your back is what holds up your position in perspective. that's why people always say things like "sit stright, or sit up" lol just thought of that alright thanks for the feed anyways Calli sorry you weren't feeling it! Let's keep the responses rolling.... get some other feelings on this matter

[Godwasheeeeeeeeeeeeere]

this was cool man , id like to see u do a dif piece i dont like the whole hypin someone elses shit wit urs either

[Vallus]

this was a pretty good piece
i liked where you went with your topic
and it was pretty creative aswell
the verse didnt seem to really pertain
to the topic though....and some parts
didnt rhyme which kind put
a halt to the other smooth flowing lines
that did rhyme...either way it was
an interesting read and was composed
well with a good structure....


props...stay up man^

[2triple0]

alright i see... maybe i should start getting more of the details right when i go through my pieces... sometimes i talk about someone else, because i feel like it's too difficult to talk about myself, like i don't have the strength to say anything about my own life... it's not like my life is that bad anymore, but at one point i really wasn't feeling that well you know... anyways i'm sorry some of you weren't feeling the flow but i guess i'll have to let it slide... thanks for hte feed appreciate any links and i will be quick to respond...

[Chris-Poth]

I aint trying to be the wet blanket here but really guys? I mean this piece was pretty awful. Sometimes you gotta cut syllables man, a lot of people will tell you flow doesnt matter in text, but i think you've just proved that it does.

told himself i'm not getting locked after i got robbed by some hoods...
then the story flashes back to the girl with good looks
and she is trying to get some drugs off this dude
and he won't give her any and then she says come to the front
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Terrible, first and foremost stop beginning lines with "and". But i dont care what you start these 2 bars with, its just bad. Step it up dude. Maybe some compound syllable rhymes would even be nice. And then the DR in the piece is a bit overwhelming i suppose

[Chris-Poth]

I aint trying to be the wet blanket here but really guys? I mean this piece was pretty awful. Sometimes you gotta cut syllables man, a lot of people will tell you flow doesnt matter in text, but i think you've just proved that it does.

told himself i'm not getting locked after i got robbed by some hoods...
then the story flashes back to the girl with good looks
and she is trying to get some drugs off this dude
and he won't give her any and then she says come to the front
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Terrible, first and foremost stop beginning lines with "and". But i dont care what you start these 2 bars with, its just bad. Step it up dude. Maybe some compound syllable rhymes would even be nice. And then the DR in the piece is a bit overwhelming i suppose

[yung nothing]

I aint trying to be the wet blanket here but really guys? I mean this piece was pretty awful. Sometimes you gotta cut syllables man, a lot of people will tell you flow doesnt matter in text, but i think you've just proved that it does.

told himself i'm not getting locked after i got robbed by some hoods...
then the story flashes back to the girl with good looks
and she is trying to get some drugs off this dude
and he won't give her any and then she says come to the front
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Terrible, first and foremost stop beginning lines with "and". But i dont care what you start these 2 bars with, its just bad. Step it up dude. Maybe some compound syllable rhymes would even be nice. And then the DR in the piece is a bit overwhelming i suppose

You only have a couple posts and you are calling people awful? That takes some nerve. Triple should kick your ass for that. I mean feedback is all well and good but to come on here on your first day and start calling people awful. You gotta be kidding.

[Chris-Poth]

Im from a different site bro. And who cares? That piece was terrible. If you know it, and i said it, whats the issue?

[Chris-Poth]

Especially since with my review of his shit im sure you know Im aware of what im talking about. Im not new to rap homie. Bad is bad. Im gonna review some more open mics today. And im not sugar coating it for anyone, if its dope, i'll tell you its dope. If its anything like this shit was, i'll tell you how whack it is, and to the best of my ability tell you what you can do to elevate

[yung nothing]

I guess but saying stuff is awful seems unnecessary. Different styles I guess.

[Chris-Poth]

Perhaps your right. Maybe Lil Wayne has a different style then me. But in my opinion, he is awful

[yung nothing]

I see your point. A to lil wayne specifically I like the way his stuff sounds at times but he is not a talented rapper really.