ok 10 to 15 lines
blind spit check in 30 mins drop 30 after that...
no
d/r
c/v
h/v
no show dq
IZON
webb
ok 10 to 15 lines
blind spit check in 30 mins drop 30 after that...
no
d/r
c/v
h/v
no show dq
good shyt...also no FEEDIN dis my check after u check drop due in 30 min...good luck nigga
yo this is my check good luck to u to
dis nigga internet obsessed nickmaned himself webb
or maybe u in love wit spiderman ~said u was da best head he ever had
have u depressed after dis loss in da corner feelin blue
try to block it out but it bounce off me & stick to You{a webb is sticky}
ya flo is straight shitty guess dats expected tho~right?
only time hot shyt leak from you is from bugs asses at night{spiders make web's mostly at night}
born wit a little problem somethings really wrong wit WEBB
sonogram said u was a boy but came out a bitch wit pussy between hiz legs
u must gotta helluva appetite think u big enough to eat me
have dis nigga leavin da site fatster den niggaz get da boot at DENNY'S
my bad man here u go i have to do some work and shit but here it is.....
I come through dressed clothed in jet black with steel toed boots
I'm gonna stomp this young niggas ass right back to his "Roots"
Coming into this battle you'll be the one whos quick to fall
I bet he couldn't find a decent bar partying at the Marti Gra
I'm heaven sent, the shit you just spit to me is irrelavent
With my intelligence it seems you have a speech inpediment
You must have memory problems or maybe something worse
Cuz this kid can't remember his location or date of birth
I was expecting a great verse from this "god" not something this corny
Last time I checked I wasn't tired so no need to type me a bedtime story
I was expecting your verse to have some sort of substance
I mean this is a fucking battle not a collaberation you dumb shit
I've seen better punchlines dripped in first grade lunches
Now go to the back of the class with the rest of the dunces
yo uppin this shit now lets see whats up
webb gets my vote for this battle, mainly because his shit actually rhymes had creative rhymes also the flow was way better, izon sometimes ya had stretchedlines, ya punches were just weak and your flow wa snot good so improve oyu skillz
vote/webb
THE FAMILY.
uppin
Izon best-
ya flo is straight shitty guess dats expected tho~right?
only time hot shyt leak from you is from bugs asses at night
~VS~
webb best-
I've seen better punchlines dripped in first grade lunches
Now go to the back of the class with the rest of the dunces
IZON- Well I guess u tried- U need a lot of work before anyone takes u seriously- "bounces off me and sticks to you"- in any context or with any added side bar is not ok- You had no rhyme scheme- verse structure- wordplay- flo- punches that hit- or personals that worked- my advice to you is go check out other battles... many other battles- cause u need ta learn- that sticks and stones may break ur bones- but words can fuckin kill u- good luck
Webb- This was no battle for u- did u learn anything battl'n IZON?- if you did- get that shit outta ur head right now- any future battles should not be even slightly this easy- otherwise-
nice rhymes- u hit some multis- personal punches were blazin kid- nice to see some wordplay- u can still develop ur rhyme scheme- and structure- keep battl'n
V/ Webb
izon- struc. was a no no. ur lines were stretched man. punches were weak. even tho u made sum kind of attempt 2 do personals, ur use of metas was wack. dat probly y ur lines were stretched. try dis out: 32 syllables per bar iight?? flow was fucked b/c of struc n i wasnt even feelin ur verse
webb- da best thing dat stood out was a bedtime story line... cuz i did almost fall asleep readin his shit. no offense 2 otha dude. ur punches were witty, but so-so in strentgh 4 da most part. struc. was good. flow was iight
v/ webb 4 betta overall verse
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cool uppin for the 3rd time
I appreciate da feedback N shyt.............UPPIN...
uppin for the 4th time
webb won wit beta punches and structure the other kidneeds to work on punches they were basic....
v/webb
uppin for the last time......................
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