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House Rulez
45 min. after check-in
U spit first
10-16 lines
House Rulez
45 min. after check-in
U spit first
Ay Ill Post My Vote When Yall Spit It Betta Be Tight Im Out Check Out My Latest Battle With Frivolous And My Other One With Man Got Game
Check.. why you make the room so Late at night? fuck it i be done in half hour or so. you drop your shit off tomorrow whatever.
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MondoThugs
I serve my lyrics to you cold. Wrap em’ up and bag it.
Tell me any man that calls himself Suave aint a motha-fuckin faggot.
How much dick you gotta swallow to earn that name anyway?
You more familiar with head than sleepy hollow man any day.
I call myself the industry, but Suave you small business.
The fuck gave you the theory that you could actually win this?
I know you from Atlanta bitch, so hows this?
Sit back and relax while I slam you like Josh Smith
Suave you can try to top it, but you frightened and shook
Less chance at this than John Bobbit, and a hand-job from captain hook.
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MondoThugs
It's been 2 whole days now since we agreed to the battle, 1.5 days since the battle was created, Suave Man is a Fuck-tard. Makin battles that he dont even show up too. Just gimme the win I dont got time for this weak nugga.
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MondoThugs
My bad on the wait I am a active high school senior. Trying to get my hours so I can get my cords for graduation and working on scholarship money. But that's no excuse, Ima spit in a few.
U can serve yo lyrics cold, I'll burn them like an untrained cooker
U hoping I'm gay cause u run an Industry of homosexual hookers
But sorry, I'm straighter than that road to heaven, plus my style's supreme
While u droppin more Bullshit than Chicago's NBA team
While I drop more dope stuff than a crackhead on the run
My rhyme's a nuclear weapon while yours just a water gun
Industry yo entire verse was weaker than Nemo's right fin
And you had so many gay references I'm wondering what Industry are you in
U contribute to hip hop what makes Jay-Z and Andre 3000 not want to rap no mo'
I can put salt in yo rap shoes but the Industry's lyrics still won't grow
Beware Industry 'cause like hair with no shampoo I'm about to break yo ends
Because I'm going to do what anti-rap politicians couldn't do, bring the Industry to an end
kk thanks for showin up... this nuggas still garbage tho. uppin for votes '1st'
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MondoThugs
2nd up for votes.
These 2 short verses easy to disect, critique, vote and crown the winner-(me)
Help me out and vote. get this shit closed.
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MondoThugs
aight... industry..
the first part of ya verse is played out... verses with dick, faggot, cum, gay... are all played out unles you use wordplays or metaphors...
last part of ya verse is too much gangsta... i suggest you try using metas and wordplays to make your verse more complex....
only line that stood out is your captain hook-hand job line...
Mr. Suave... got some metas, wordplays and some decent rhyming but your flow is off at some points... you can try rewording...
overall:
mulits=none
meta=suave(My rhyme's a nuclear weapon while yours just a water gun
)
wordplay=suave(Because I'm going to do what anti-rap politicians couldn't do, bring the Industry to an end)
punch=suave
overall.. suave man
S U R G E R Y
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[A]bove
[N]ormal
Appreciate the feedback, SerJeri but can I get some votes
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