jus spittin suttun

[KiLLah-J]

i spit that heat that you cant stand to bear/
drop a track n 15 mins n goes platinum lik sisqo hair/
come thru ya hood grippin a tec/
oh no here i go cockin it back/
there it go in ya chest thru ya heart n out ya back/
tha ladies lovin me n got them lickin my nutsack/
i stay wit a switchblade/
that leave ya wit a hole n ya ribcage/
n leave ya face sliced up lik chocolate cake/
i spit sick lik my throats infected/
u jus anotha bitch thats on my check list/
i cut mor throats then jason/
u tha next one im chasin/
i got tha punch that caves ya face in/
and i got mor scares then west craven/
step up in my face ill blow u away/
u tryna see tomorro but u gon be gone todai/
i got mor sting then a slap on tha face lik after shave/
my fist is lik nightquails cept u gon be sleep for days/
i aint that mean jus look at me and focus/
but im on that scary shit lik hocus pocus/

~HoLLa~

[Vikkie™]

fix ur structur...eh wordplay basic.......concept old you lost me wit that sisqo thing the whole platinum thing wasok but lose the sisqo..teks are over rated not everyone has one....blowin out my back on a freestyle take that to cypher,this was decent for a newb good job

[CrazyCarl]

Kind of a simple verse. Your flow was off with changing line lengths. Post some writtens and work on thinking of a topic.

[Mistral]

You need to leave 2 links to 2 open mics that you left decent feedback on or this gets closed, Thanks.