You wont like this, RB.

[Freeman]

[You really wont like this, god believers. If you find it offensive.. not my fault. This is my opinion, yours is yours.]

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God, are you there bitch? Good, fucking listen..
Why the fuck aint you there when my eyes start to glisten,
with tears, my fears, will always keep on growin'..
While i keep on flowin' you will always keep on blowin',
a dick, you prick, stupid cunt faced whore..
Well done, fucker, i dont believe in you no more..
Proud, i say it loud... "god, i fucking hate you",
poke your fucking eyes out bitch, before i fucking make you..
Cut your ears too, doesnt matter if you cant hear or see..
You're supposed to be everywhere.. why arent you next to me?
You dont listen, do you, bitch, as i sit in my house..
cunt, i hope you choke on that fucking dick in your mouth..
You can call me Satan... working under cover..
Whatever, next time jus' tell your dad to use a fucking rubber..
I'll think of you, when im sinning, HA! Thou shalt not lie!
Fuck off, i hate you, bitch..
.. go and fucking die.

[Aines]

dope....gtg offline now but will comeback 2morrow with a breakdown

[Moniker]

hmm. theres so much i can say about this, but ill try to keep it short. first off, there seems to have been some issue, or some occurance, where you
needed God and he didnt answer your prayers. God does answer prayer, but
if so, why not all of them? i have no idea. and things of that nature are
beyond our comprehension while we are here on earth. I think the fact that
you atleast acknowledge there's a God is a good start. But just realize that
as long as you've accepted Jesus in your heart God is always with you. But
hard times will come, and as they do come and go i dont understand why
people blame God, when infact Satan is the one to blame...

[DALC]

^seriously.
as for the pieace itself its pretty good.
Maybe upp voabulary though because the words sometimes were to simplistic.
and theres amillion ways to diss god besides saying that hes sucking a dick.just a thought...

[Freeman]

First off,
This was a rant, at 'God'

Mindless, yes, you are right about some 'occurance' in my life where i needed 'God' and he didnt listen, nor help.

This was an extremely important thing that im not going to share, but yeah, i have a very good reason, infact, quite a few.

This piece wasnt meant to be anything special, i just want you all to know my feelings, through my writing, which you do.

Rants are good sometimes.

[spokenoh]

It is his opinion and I sure have felt that way before.

Goddamn(pun not intended) you, Freeman. I was intent on writing a similar piece, but you beat me to the topica. I will still do it though...just a different approach.
Good emotion in this and good writer's voice. Every line felt like it was being directed towards at God, and I could feel the frustration at the beginning of the piece transcend to an angry, rebellious voice.
Good flow with internal multies to keep the flow going smoothly and following up with good transitions. No metaphors or simile's which was a dissapointment but those never really seemed to be your forte.
Overall, good piece, nothing extraordinary. It was short. Peace man.

[The MC]

very interesting piece......not that i agree with everything in there but i thought it was dope trying sumthin different than the rest......its the type of piece that if it were to get on tv in a music video or sumthin it would be very contriversal and shit but u would get noticed.......keep at it....i would like to see otha topics from u

[Freeman]

Thanks, Pinacle, man.

The MC, i done alot of topics, you only just joined, thats why you havent read them.

Peace.

[Vylint]

It is his opinion and I sure have felt that way before.

Goddamn(pun not intended) you, Freeman. I was intent on writing a similar piece, but you beat me to the topica.

You act like the topic is infact original? wtf.. 1000 other people beat you to it too.

This was ok.

[Moniker]

alright. before i only commented on the subject, this time ill reply to the
content. i agree with xtreme. there are plenty more ways to show and
describe your feelings then telling God to suck a dick. that made the piece
seem very ignorant, and as if an un-poetic 12 year old wrote this. (and i
know you are capable then much more then that. it also didnt show that
you could come up with a legitimate argument towards God, so you had
to relate to profanity.. and excessive profanity at that. From what ive seen
from you in the past i expected much more indepth concerns and
explanations as to WHY. i understand you wanting others to know your
feelings, but especially with as controversial a topic as this. it could have
been approached much better and wiser. and i expected more from you...

[Bloom.Quist]

Does it matter if someone else has done the topic? Free wanted to simply express his feelings. Who gives a fuck about the topic.

[Freeman]

Mindless..

You think im going to fill the piece full of reasoning about why i feel this?

Fuck you.

My life is my life, i write about my feelings in that life, not the reasons why i feel them.

Its personal shit, which i aint sharing with anyone.

I care this much --> ' ' <-- about what anyone thinks of this piece.

I myself know it sucks, for me.

I dont care.

Im venting, so yeah, whatever.

Also, for fuck sake, while venting, i dont stop to consider if its got a good enough argument in it. Fuck you, its my argument, and my reasons are very good. Hence, im not going to think of indepth ways to tell god to stick it up his ass. Ima come out, straight, and tell him to fuck off.

Also, how can a topic like this be original? What, you think im going to be the only one to think god is a cunt? Ignorant dumbass.

Peace.

[Moniker]

^ check yourself, it was criticism, learn how to take it instead of complain. i could care less what you think, your entitled to your own opinon.
all im saying is that it would have been better if you had given more
thought into this. write about whatever you want, but if you even
ackowledge it sucks then why post it?. rants are fine, but let it be what
it is, a rant. not try to pass it off as some OM verse. coming out straight
and "telling God to fuck off" may seem the best way to express it for you,
but it is indeed very ignorant. im dissapionted,
thats all, relax.

[Freeman]

We could go on all night.

I'll end it now.

Goodnight.

[Bloom.Quist]

Goodnight?

Its only 5:00...