Originally Posted by
Baron Mynd
It would probably sound a lot better as a track than it reads by text standards, that’s no slight it’s just difficult to gauge something by the metrics of another format. The beat is there, but without the other elements like flow, delivery, presence etc we can only really judge this on its text merits and it isn’t strong by those standards in text. Again, that’s no slight, it’s just an entirely different realm and difficult to judge this by because of it. Purely as a text verse, I think the shorter lined flow was cool, the syllable count per line was pretty on-point but as a reader the content was attention grabbing enough to really hold my interest. There’s morning I felt stood out as quotable or that made me want to re-read through, as a listener I would perhaps be more engaged and ready to forgive it more rather than pick it apart. It’s like I say, text probably isn’t the medium for this.
Keep that pen moving.
